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I've scrapped almost the entire thing in the end. Re-writing it is making a difference but I'm still not happy with it. I have the same trouble writing lyrics I just can't translate the images I see into words effectively.
Maybe you can start from the feelings those images wake in you?

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"the dastardly bastard with gasoline drippin off the back of a fat bitch lasso'd and draggin as I'm blastin the gas with the CCR spinnin, passionately graspin the PBR sippin" "dont mean to brag but bitch I party hard/jeffrey dahmer shaped pinatas in the backyard filled with bars/lesbionic bitches in the kitchen with syringes blowin kisses to some midgets huffing whip-its playing dentist" "float the bud keg till im gropin on a slut's leg trying to get her butt fed, no rubber, nuff said. leave her drawers blood red, trippin off the portabella, leave her sleepin, Cinderella, ass stretched like mozerella"
Fucking-A dude, this is the way I've always wanted to party. I hella' want to party with you and your lesbioninc bitches and their boy toy midgets. I will not drink PBR or any ant other stupid beer for that matter. but I'm down with a little CCR and the "Portabellas". Would you care to kick down a sample of your vocal styling for the good people of Metal Forum's Global Hub of Apriciation? Wicked love to hear it Bub!

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On 22-9-2014 at 2:49 AM, RelentlessOblivion said:

Turns out what I thought was just a speedbump is actually a brick wall. I've even tried re-writing the entire story with no success. Perhaps I should abandon this story for now and start writing something else.

If you ever need a sparring partner, I'm available. I write a lot and have joined a few writing forums, so I might be able to help. Sometimes all it takes is a fresh perspective.

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Sadly I lost all that work when my old computer decided to commit suicide. I haven't really done much writing since.

 

EDIT: The draft mentioned above turned out to be a dead end. Turns out I actually hated the idea. Should have a first draft of another short story finished this week so if people are interested I'll post it here.

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I've been writing all my life. I've written novel drafts, short stories, poems, screenplays, reviews and articles. Closest I've gotten to publishing my work was in a local newspaper and writing and filming a short film in school. 

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