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I am not sure if this is the right place to post, but I was hoping to get some critique on some of the bm songs that I am writing.  I only have guitar parts for now.  I am specifically looking for tips on how to add more depth and complexity to my songs.  I am trying to go after a sound inspired by Burzum and Drudkh, but would like to incorporate some aspects of drone metal.  Here are links to the tabs.  Thanks in advance for any help.

http://www.guitartabcreator.com/tabs/balor/forsaken-lands

http://www.guitartabcreator.com/tabs/balor/traveler-gates

http://www.guitartabcreator.com/tabs/balor/silent-depths

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I'm moving this to the promo section for now - not the best fit but it's the space we have for discussion of our own projects. Honestly, tabs aren't going to be much use. Even a crappy phone recording would be infinitely better. Get a basic song structure in place as a road map, preferably with some drum and vocal ideas, and then you can get a better idea of how and where to work towards depth and complexity.

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Wow check out my song...LOL. From glancing at the first tab I would say you just need more time playing an instrument and familiarizing yourself with each role in the band. Think about what the rhythm section is going to be doing and what the lead can do to accent this "atmosphere" you want to create. Burzum is really simple in every aspect thats something to consider. Drudkh isn't. If you want to fake it till you make it maybe just learn to take the riffs you already have and play them on strings 1-2-3 as a variation. Octave chords are great too and if you turn them diminished they become pretty evil. Good luck

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On 7/31/2017 at 8:12 PM, EndlessEnd said:

Hey man.  Are you just trying to tweak your sound or are you actually going for adding different layers/incorporating different aspects into it?

Honestly, probably both.  While I have played the guitar for a while. this is my first time trying to write music, and am still learning.  These songs were some of the first that I came up with, and they are really repetitive/one-dimensional.  Any suggestions?

On 8/1/2017 at 8:37 AM, Mausoleum said:

Wow check out my song...LOL. From glancing at the first tab I would say you just need more time playing an instrument and familiarizing yourself with each role in the band. Think about what the rhythm section is going to be doing and what the lead can do to accent this "atmosphere" you want to create. Burzum is really simple in every aspect thats something to consider. Drudkh isn't. If you want to fake it till you make it maybe just learn to take the riffs you already have and play them on strings 1-2-3 as a variation. Octave chords are great too and if you turn them diminished they become pretty evil. Good luck

Good ideas, thanks.  I will try them out to see how they could make my songs more interesting.

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