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15 hours ago, Will said:

Thanks, man. I've been doing vocals for around a year and a half. Any improvement in tone since last time I put vocals up on here is probably largly due to advice from FA.

Cool, I'll definitely talk to him if I want to do vocals of my own. I'll start thinking of what the next hook will be.

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1 hour ago, salmonellapancake said:

Hey, sorry its been so long. Ive been vacationing in Greece, and i dont have my laptop, let alone my music equipment, but im coming home today, so hopefully ill record something in the next couple days.

Looking forward to it. Was the holiday fun?

I'm off uni for a few weeks so I should be able to better participate, hopefully I'll be able to record guitars and things for now rather than using crappy synthesisers.

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On 6/25/2017 at 0:49 AM, Will said:

Looking forward to it. Was the holiday fun?

I'm off uni for a few weeks so I should be able to better participate, hopefully I'll be able to record guitars and things for now rather than using crappy synthesisers.

Yeah it was awesome. Great food, great people. Awesome place, overall. 

 

And that's cool. Unfortunately, I had some problems with college applications as soon as i got back from vacation that kept me really busy, but I'll be able to record now.

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2 hours ago, salmonellapancake said:

This may be the most dumb riff I have ever created. It was meant to be something to get me out of my comfort zone. The concept is "Curious Ecstasy", and this is my contribution:

 

https://drive.google.com/file/d/0B2C1fOIUobfyU0xrSzZvRTRRWFk/view?usp=sharing

I think that the timing and dynamics might be out in some parts and that the high and low riffs don't always seem to fit together right, but in different contexts each could work quite well. Regardless, pushing your boundaries is pretty much always a good thing even if it doesn't immediately yield your best work.

Oh, and I meant to ask earlier; what course are you applying for?

As I'm back at uni, I'll hopefully be able to write and record some stuff on the weekend.

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Sorry man, the weekend turned out to be more chaotic than I'd planned. I'll try during the week. If I've  got nothing done by the end of this weekend, I'll just post MIDI files.

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On 7/12/2017 at 4:38 PM, Will said:

I think that the timing and dynamics might be out in some parts and that the high and low riffs don't always seem to fit together right, but in different contexts each could work quite well. Regardless, pushing your boundaries is pretty much always a good thing even if it doesn't immediately yield your best work.

Oh, and I meant to ask earlier; what course are you applying for?

As I'm back at uni, I'll hopefully be able to write and record some stuff on the weekend.

I'm applying to get into UC Santa Cruz as a Linguistics Major. There was just a technical problem with my application, but everything is almost fixed and I'm hoping to receive good news from them soon.

21 hours ago, Will said:

Sorry man, the weekend turned out to be more chaotic than I'd planned. I'll try during the week. If I've  got nothing done by the end of this weekend, I'll just post MIDI files.

And don't even worry. I've been pretty busy, too.

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4 hours ago, salmonellapancake said:

I'm applying to get into UC Santa Cruz as a Linguistics Major. There was just a technical problem with my application, but everything is almost fixed and I'm hoping to receive good news from them soon.

Oh, cool.

 

I took a note out of your book and made something smaller that I could actually finish rather than trying and failing to make something unnecessarily long for this game. https://drive.google.com/open?id=0B3Qig96mjFpaOTVTeFBpTUpsRnc

I wrote it on the weekend, recorded what I could at around midnight last night and mixed it in my spares at uni.

I'm reasonably happy with the writing but not 100% on the takes. The mix is pretty rough and I forgot to swap out the standard snare sample (although I managed to make it a little more likable during the mixing).

The two overlapping riffs were originally going to be one riff, but I decided I like this more mid-recording.

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On 7/17/2017 at 6:25 PM, Will said:

Oh, cool.

 

I took a note out of your book and made something smaller that I could actually finish rather than trying and failing to make something unnecessarily long for this game. https://drive.google.com/open?id=0B3Qig96mjFpaOTVTeFBpTUpsRnc

I wrote it on the weekend, recorded what I could at around midnight last night and mixed it in my spares at uni.

I'm reasonably happy with the writing but not 100% on the takes. The mix is pretty rough and I forgot to swap out the standard snare sample (although I managed to make it a little more likable during the mixing).

The two overlapping riffs were originally going to be one riff, but I decided I like this more mid-recording.

I'll check it out when I'm home. Looking forward to it.

On 7/17/2017 at 6:25 PM, Will said:

Oh, cool.

 

I took a note out of your book and made something smaller that I could actually finish rather than trying and failing to make something unnecessarily long for this game. https://drive.google.com/open?id=0B3Qig96mjFpaOTVTeFBpTUpsRnc

I wrote it on the weekend, recorded what I could at around midnight last night and mixed it in my spares at uni.

I'm reasonably happy with the writing but not 100% on the takes. The mix is pretty rough and I forgot to swap out the standard snare sample (although I managed to make it a little more likable during the mixing).

The two overlapping riffs were originally going to be one riff, but I decided I like this more mid-recording.

I'll check it out when I'm home. Looking forward to it.

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5 hours ago, salmonellapancake said:

Dude that was fucking awesome. Love the groovy sweep-picking. Very nice. You really know how to give a song some connotation.

Thanks man, I think this was about my third idea based on this theme, the first sounding too creepy and the second sounding like something from a Christmas carol.

I guess I'll give it a little while before starting a new theme just in case someone wants to add something.

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12 hours ago, Will said:

Thanks man, I think this was about my third idea based on this theme, the first sounding too creepy and the second sounding like something from a Christmas carol.

I guess I'll give it a little while before starting a new theme just in case someone wants to add something.

Alright, cool man. 

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4 hours ago, salmonellapancake said:

Hey will! I've been majorly lagging on material for this, but I've been very inspired lately so i'll put something together soon. Cheers!

Cool, I think it might have been my turn anyway but I've been too busy and I just didn't get around to it (I have other stuff that I've been wanting to record for half a year that is still untouched). If you wanna start a new theme I'll hopefully be able to join in.

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1 hour ago, Will said:

Cool, I think it might have been my turn anyway but I've been too busy and I just didn't get around to it (I have other stuff that I've been wanting to record for half a year that is still untouched). If you wanna start a new theme I'll hopefully be able to join in.

Yeah, man. I'll try to contribute something. I've been really busy, too.

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