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Here is a first stab at a little number I'm calling "Mortal Cavity" as a working title- Your untimely death was such a tragedy But I feel there is still a place for me inside your mortal cavity When I saw your lovely cadaver I voice inside my head said what matter that she's dead I've simply got to have her Chorus: How do you feel about me as I feel about you? I'll lock the your gurney wheels before I get on No no darling, don't move an inch, you can leave your smock on ...Well, there's a start anyway, I feel like some of the rhyming is a bit forced, and obviously the narrative needs developing, so I welcome any suggestions.

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Here is a first stab at a little number I'm calling "Mortal Cavity" as a working title- Your untimely death was such a tragedy But I feel there is still a place for me inside your mortal cavity When I saw your lovely cadaver I voice inside my head said what matter that she's dead I've simply got to have her Chorus: How do you feel about me as I feel about you? I'll lock the your gurney wheels before I get on No no darling, don't move an inch, you can leave your smock on ...Well, there's a start anyway, I feel like some of the rhyming is a bit forced, and obviously the narrative needs developing, so I welcome any suggestions.
:lol: That's great, I have to write some music for this!
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I can be the sleezy manager who slicks his hair back unnecessarily' date=' wears cheap tasteless suits, takes constant sniffly trips to the bathroom/closet/corner, and kisses his clients on the cheeks so often in a manner that even makes them uncomfortable.[/quote'] That's every other guy on my campus.
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Here is a first stab at a little number I'm calling "Mortal Cavity" as a working title- Your untimely death was such a tragedy But I feel there is still a place for me inside your mortal cavity When I saw your lovely cadaver I voice inside my head said what matter that she's dead I've simply got to have her Chorus: How do you feel about me as I feel about you? I'll lock the your gurney wheels before I get on No no darling, don't move an inch, you can leave your smock on ...Well, there's a start anyway, I feel like some of the rhyming is a bit forced, and obviously the narrative needs developing, so I welcome any suggestions.
Makes me think of Macabre. Hilarious irreverance towards murder, death, and other often cliched topics.
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Her untimely death was such a tragedy But I still feel there is a place for me Inside her MORTAL CAVITY You know what your sweet love means to me So what if you've been dead since '93? How do you feel about me? As I feel about you? I'll lock the gurney wheels before I get on. Oh no no love, don't move an inch. You can keep your smock on. Her untimely death may have stopped her heart But to my delight, I'll never be apart From her MORTAL CAVITY I love the way you look when you sleep Your body is mine to cherish and keep I can remember how you looked when we met Six feet deep MORTAL CAVITY :D (thanks to Gorbo for lyrics, you're gonna hate this...) 

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Rats' date=' and I forgot that verse. That's what I get for thinking I remembered it all. Perhaps I'll do an extended version and fit it in. BAN, I don't know how you can stand doing all this from your phone, it sucks.[/quote'] Tapatalk makes most things easier, but some things are a pain in the ass if you're not on a computer. Mostly anything that would take multiple windows, having to save your draft, exit, find what you're looking for, copy, get back in, paste, just much easier with a mouse and browser tabs. Sent from my HTC PH39100 using Tapatalk 2
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Nah' date=' I think Gorbo will hate it, he's not a fan of the more extreme stuff. Maybe being involved in the song will bring him around. ;)[/quote'] I certainly don't hate it, and it definitely made me laugh. Still though, If you had used your Golden Words Voice it might have been more romantic. But lets face it, your mother was never going to appreciate this one, and neither was mine for that matter. Nice work Alabaster. editPS I think we should all be studying Estonian, that would be badassed. I wonder what their standards of decency are like there, could be a natural fit for Black Milk Productions and the "Dead Sex Show" if Savanna is not receptive.
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I've never listened to them. Are they any good?
Their first album was pretty good, although it had a little too much slam for my liking. Still, the whole thing was underpinned by a pretty good riffing and melodic sense, which made the chugs somewhat more bearable. Their second album is a lot more progressive and I enjoyed it a fair bit.
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Their first album was pretty good' date=' although it had a little too much slam for my liking. Still, the whole thing was underpinned by a pretty good riffing and melodic sense, which made the chugs somewhat more bearable. Their second album is a lot more progressive and I enjoyed it a fair bit.[/quote'] Thanks, I'll have to check it out when I have an opportunity. I do like some slam sometimes, anyway.
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Thanks' date=' I'll have to check it out when I have an opportunity. I do like some slam sometimes, anyway.[/quote'] I've actually heard a fair amount of good death metal recently. Excruciating Thoughts, Oblivion, Vale of Pnath, Gigan and Omnihility are all recent discoveries and I liked them all.
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I've actually heard a fair amount of good death metal recently. Excruciating Thoughts' date=' Oblivion, Vale of Pnath, Gigan and Omnihility are all recent discoveries and I liked them all.[/quote'] Cool. I keep meaning to listen to Gigan... never even heard of the other guys, I'll have to hit YouTube at some point. This "no home internet connection" thing blows. Streaming on my phone doesn't seem to work too well.
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