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Re: Your Lyrics Hey guys. I've been writing bunch of lyrics for some songs, and this is quite new for me. I am kinda of a semi - perfectionist in some cases, so i strive to write them as good, meaningful etc., as possible. So i thought, maybe you could help me out and give them a read, post some criticism, maybe drop an advice or something, fix possible mistakes (i'm not a native english speaker). I have this part of them, which i imagine them as faster, nearly in the ending of the song. Im using this 'puzzle' idea, when i have a piece, and i put stuff arond it untill i get the actual image. What i'd like to get are some ideas, maybe how to put and what to put in the begining and maybe something in the end, so it would make sense and have that 'evolving rage' thingy. So here are the lyrics, really sloppy... You misleading wretch, touched by contagious taint You resigned, docile lickspittle You battered drone, kneeled at chaos' feet You mindless, senseless, mechanic - machine of lies and deceit You Demon! A pest of surveillance An organic shadow, persecuting my every step You morbid leech, ailing the plague of the masses Yet fawn by your collosal - god, sheltered by his tyranny.

Hi, any tips how to higher - up my screaming technique? since i have a rather low voice, i was able to do really high screams a year ago, for example, but can't really do it now. The thing is, if i try harder, i rip my throat a lot. Thanks